You've been one of my favorites for a long time, but re-reading this has reminded me that I absolutely love your writing.
And Siruud.
I can't wait for him to realize he's in love with MC.
I found quite a few of the same issues the first poster did. Looks like just missing some opening/closing tags for your italics, so hopefully won't be too much work.
I can't wait for more Manor Hill and Hybrid! And this new one I just noticed! Just to be sure, the demo is ended right after meeting the two agents outside the subway, correct? There is no option to continue or restart.
I love this format and hope to see a lot more works migrate that way.