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This one was a bit of a doozy for me. The thumbnail is... I think unintentionally hilarious. The giant flaming meteor, the weird placement of the text, the giant black empty space, the wolf sequestered down to the side.

I feel like there definitely could've been some political commentary at play with an insane US president causing the apocalypse but... he's right? Like it turns out he actually was a prophet from god? Huh???? Bold creative decision. Really it just felt very stilted to me. The two main characters are really the only people rushing anywhere in the apocalypse? They also spent a lot of time talking about how much they love each other without really giving any examples or showing us. It's a really cheesy ending to a really cheesy story, and that's not inherently bad, but I think a little bit better thought into the characters relationship and their struggles. Everything just kinda happens and then it's over. 

Still, I'm glad you got your VN out and turned in before the deadline, you should be proud of yourself!

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Thank you for taking the time to read this!

I'm glad you found thumbnail hilarious! Despite it being unintentional it's one of those things that when you look back at it, it was a goofy product.

Yeah, I agree with what you said.  The story was built on a cheesy af plotline and I didn't allow myself to let the idea cook enough to make a more coherent plotline that would give more reasoning and depth to the story. So it was kinda destined to be a dumpster fire that I lit myself.

Thank you for your encouragement! I plan on trying not to make another story like this again, and focus more on ironing out the story and the character interactions.