Patrice brainrot Commence!
A very cute story, with a bit of pain painted on at the end. The plot itself is cool (I’m really trying not to be bias cuz I stan Moonlight Castle), though felt a little empty if you didn’t read the main story beforehand. The story centered around Patrice x Oliver, and how Patrice still can’t get over Nia. However, the spread of scenes felt really disproportionate. For what seemed like 1/4th of the story, you were talking with Liam at the gym. It seemed to me like the author’s intention is for the reader to get used to how the character’s act, but it felt unnecessary compared to the weight of the other scenes (plus you can introduce Patrice’s personality in the relationship anyways). Liam’s whole existence seemed less like an important/side character but more like being there for continuity (if you’ve read MC you’d know). There clearly wasn’t enough room for the last scene to really settle, and it’s beautiful yes, but hardly stir the amount of emotion the author probably wanted.
There’s a lot of absolutely delicious artwork for this story, and an animation too <333333. Oliver my bbg ilysm. However the split of music is kind of disproportionate, with most tracks being at the end. Thematically, it’s makes sense because it’s the gym’s music, but the scene was long so it affects this too.
I kind of struggle to get the theme for this one, but with a “little” help from the writer himself (ty Keyko) Nia is both the ‘Light’ and the ‘Dark’ for Patrice, she was his love, but also what weighted him back from moving on, what caused him to lose his relationship w/ Oliver. I actually love submissions that has the same thing be ‘Light’ and ‘Dark’ so I really like this one too.
P.S Oliver please appear in Moonlight Castle I’ll wife you up I mean what.
P.P.S The three Dylan mention got me itchin around here, all my homies love Dylan
P.P.P.S Please don’t burn me alive at the stake on Discord
Rating: 4453