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Alright man, I'm gonna be honest this one didn't quite land for me. 

Going to jump straight into the breakdown here, so Spoilers from this point forward.

Implementation of Theme:

I can see it. Couple different ways actually. We have Alex and John being lights for each other in the face of an apocalypse, as well as their admission into heaven being a light in the darkness of death itself. There's other more literal things you could look at like the explosions in the sky and such, but the metaphorical implementations feel more impactful to me. It's fine either way.

Story:

The biggest issue for me is that I know nothing about these characters. Basically the only personality trait we see from either one of them is loving each other, which is a fine place to start, but there needs to be more than that to make a really compelling narrative. Do these guys have friends? Family? Anyone else that they'll miss or will miss them when they're admitted to their own private slice of heaven? Was there anything that they enjoyed, or were afraid of missing out on when the world ended besides just getting married? This story could probably benefit from starting a day or two earlier and showing some day-to-day interactions (that actually give insight into their characters, not just, like, scenes of them snuggling) to get the reader more invested in the cataclysm to come.

The commentary from Death also felt a bit preachy and not particularly insightful. Like, yes, the world sucks, and I think there are a lot of us who are very acutely aware of that right now, but monologuing about it directly just came off kind of... trite. 

This is drifting further from the narrative, but I also just do not believe that the freeways were totally devoid of traffic. Like these two could not have been the only ones desperately trying to reach their loved ones.

Presentation:

Presentation was fine. No issues with the stock sprites obviously and the backgrounds and music did their jobs. Very few if any glaring typos or other language errors which is always fantastic to see. Generally nothing here is done poorly, but there's not much that particularly stands out either.

Creativity:

It's a bit basic, to be honest. "Love at the end of the world" isn't particularly original on its own (there is some stiff competition built around that premise just in this jam) and this entry didn't quite have the characters or narrative complexity to elevate it.

I know this review was a little more on the critical side, but please don't take any of it the wrong way - I only intend to be constructive here. I think it's great you're finishing projects and getting stuff out there, and I hope you stick with it and keep perfecting your craft.

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First of all I want to thank you for such an in depth review! I'm completely fine with criticism and this really summed it all up nicely! So I want to give my explanation for each part of your review.

Spoilers

Theme:

I wrote this story focused on the more metaphorical implications honestly. I chose the world's end the way I did because I thought it was one of the more aesthetic ways to bring about their end.

Story:

Yeah, the characters are very one dimensional with no depth whatsoever. That is largely do to the fact that I am awful when it comes to spending my time. And then combine that with my college semester ending and you get the brain scrambling. Honestly I would be completely down to add a day or 2 before this all went down to get more background on the characters. I would just need to finish the promise of finishing the story I made for the jam back in February (Which is almost done).

I agree completely about the section for Death. I honestly wrote it and didn't look back (which I definitely should have for many reasons). So I would like to revise it after the judging sequence is done.

And you would be correct about that, but when I make the 2nd version I have an idea on how to make it make sense. Because I love to make things more complicated for myself.

Presentation:

I'm surprised that I got it to the way I did honestly, now could I have made it better? (Definitely) Like I made the background  for the death sequence in like an hour because I'm kinda a lazy fuck that didn't start making it until 3 days before the jam closed. 

Creativity:

Yeah, I agree completely that this is a pretty common idea and I made it have no substance behind it other than what's there. I actually had another story almost completed, but I realized after 11k words that it didn't really follow the theme anymore so I must've subconsciously stopped letting the creativity flow.

Finally I want to thank  you again or this wonderful review and I'd like to know your opinion for my other vn :) I hope you have a wonderful day/night!

Yeah man honestly I've been out of school long enough that I wasn't really thinking about it, but the jam lining up with finals is rough. Props for getting something done and out there, even if it wasn't as polished as it could've been. (Time management does not get any easier though... trying to get through about 2 VNs and reviews per night after work is slowly becoming a test of my sanity)

Totally get the issues with time constraints and not getting the chance to go back and make some revisions that you otherwise would/should have. I think you have a great attitude towards everything and that you can use this as a good learning experience for future projects. I'm going to try to get through the rest of the jam entries (and then I will probably need a short break from VNs after that) but I'll be sure to check out your other project later!

Thanks for the props, my main objective was just getting something out there to help me get more knowledge for the future. Even if it wasn't great. And you reminded me I need to do some reviews for the jam as well lmao. 

I appreciate the help you've given me, truly and good luck with the rest of the entries! (The VN burnout goes crazy honestly.) Also, thank you for saying you'll give my other vn a chance!