I see you submitted your game very early in the jam, less than a week since the jam started. I assume you had other commitments and couldn't invest more days into the jam to make a more complete entry.
So, considering that, it's understandable there wasn't much time to add visuals to the visual novel.
The black void does work well with the narrative though! However, at a certain point in the story, I would've expected to see Kiara and Calli show up, as well as the Underworld landscape. Would be cool if you could get that in after the jam!
The writing was great! I really got invested with the story and how things progressed depending on the player's choices. The time loop part was unexpected too! And the 4th wall break? Wow!
I like how each of the ending names was a reference to Calli's songs. Very nice touch.
Some improvement suggestions:
- Add music and sounds
- Add visuals for the parts of the story where Kiara can actually see
- Add a nice CG for each of the story endings and have a gallery to view them
- Let Kiara sit! XD
- Somehow after doing the "reset" I still couldn't go back to the initial state where Kiara doesn't know where she is, which unfortunately meant I couldn't try other options early in the game. I saved right after I chose "explore the building" so I never got to check the other branch of the story and its endings.
These are the endings I got in my playthrough:
End 3: A world of worry falling on your mind. (Live Again lyrics)
End 4: Just the intro of a brand new story (Live Again lyrics)
End 5: I die a little when we say "See you again sometime..." (Live Again lyrics)
End 6: You and me forever (Live Again lyrics)
End 9: Signing off (Live Again lyrics)
End 11: Live again (Song title)
End 0: End of a Life (Song title)
Good game!