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Hi! Thank you so much for the feedback! I really appreciate you taking the time to tell me what you thought of the game! I appreciate you pointing out the typo, I will go back and fix this before the next update. Regarding the music, I was worried the transitions might be a bit too jarring (especially in the beginning), thank you for letting me know that you felt that it distracted from the immersion. I may take out the music transition during the fight scene with the three huntsmen and keep the ambient forest music so that it's less jarring. For the scene with Axis, you make a good point that it might be better for me to restructure that section to where the dragon petting portion can be bypassed depending on her response so that her apprehension is reflected in her actions. Sometimes I develop blind spots in my writing and I don't have a beta reader, so thank you for lending your perspective!

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no worries! i leave feedback because i like where this is going and want to see it grow and improve. i'm looking forward to future updates! also, please feel free to reach out to me if you'd like a beta reader -- i'm not really a writer myself but i read a lot and love to edit, i tend to edit things in my head even as i'm reading them LOL. 

That would be amazing if you'd be willing to be a beta reader for upcoming chapters before I officially publish them! I'm still working on chapter two, but once I finish it I will reach out and see if you're still interested/available to be a beta reader for it. Thank you, it will be really helpful to get feedback on it and make changes prior to publishing it! Hehe editing is my least favorite part, I enjoy the writing more, so this will be a good balance!

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yes, please do :- ) i sometimes dont check itch for a long time so if you cant get a hold of me, i have the username pixiemelon most other places!

Hey!  I have good news! Chapter two of TLD is done and I have a good portion of chapter three finished! Let me know if you'll have any free time at any point in the next couple weeks to look it over and give me your thoughts :) 

hi! i do in fact have some free time -- do you want my discord or something so we can keep talking not in itch comments? lol

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Hey! Yay!!! We can use email or talk on discord if you'd prefer! Though I mainly use discord for gaming stuff :) Whatever works best!

sick i can email you!