I'm glad that you enjoyed the premise and ending! I do agree that there are some pitfalls in the plot that could use some reworking and I think that having a proofread or two it would help a lot (I was running on a first draft basically). The story did feel a bit awkward at parts and that's probably cause I didn't make a full outline beforehand. A lot of stuff just sorta happens because the plot demands it and I do think some of that was due to the time constraint. But to be fair this is my first time writing creatively since middle school so my skills have probably stayed around that level since then. I do appreciate your feedback as I am hoping to remake this VN and flesh it out a bit more.
Thanks for playing my first visual novel! :D