Holy wall of text, Batman. One of the criticisms of my submission was that I'd tried to pack a zine into a trifold, and you've got at least twice the amount of content that I do. I can tell that there are some extremely cool ideas here, but it's too much to absorb in this format, even for a guy who likes information density as much as I do.
I like the idea of clipping a paperclip to the physical product as a tracker, though I feel like there's enough need to flip back and forth to get all the information on this one that you'd end up knocking it inadvertently. It'd be super cool in like a zine if there was a flap inside the back cover to fold out for that.
Anyway, judging by the text at the bottom, it seems like you're mostly doing this to promote a larger commercial product, so it makes sense that there's a lot here. Maybe when you saw the theme, you saw an opportunity to use some of the rules you were working on, but then you had to include all those rules in addition to the scenario and didn't anticipate quite how much text that would require.
I feel like to run this would require copying out all the info myself into a more usable format, and I'm not about to do that. However, I'm very curious to see the actual product.