Really like this one and the multiple ticking time-bombs it presents! Here is my feedback:
+ Concise and thematic descriptions
+ Nice variety in the monsters used!
+ Clear layout and format
+ NPCs/ rival factions are fun and evocative.
- minor typos and spelling mistakes (location 4 title, for example)
- hard to picture the layout of the region, even a node map would help a lot.
- Bolded text and titles are slightly too garish in the colour version.
- The ticking clocks are great, but the rate of progression of each is a bit vague; it is hard to know how much time these things take, and it is easy to overdefine, but I think these are slightly too vague time-wise.