A classic mystery format. Style and layout is effective, but could do with editing. The redacted text in NPCs feels unnecessary. Overall, seems solid.
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The redactions seemed like the right thing at the time because I was concerned about the back being read by players. The redactions are small enough that putting the original text back in shouldn’t really change much. It was mostly just hiding locations, which would probably be in bold. Hence the concern about players reading it.
Thanks!