I read through you jam entry. Here's my written commentary on your adventure content and layout:
---Small font size and textured background make it difficult to read, as well flow of information a little complex to follow
---Cool concept with the paperclip tracker. Very small tho, I'd need a tiny paperclip.
---I like the map and how it aligns with the text in the middle column. Many crossed lines could be avoided by adjusting text flow.
---Would benefit from some formatting to break up the text and highlight key terms. Bold, italic, and underlines
---Interesting surreal dreamscape exploration, pushes the boundaries of a traditional adventure