This was a nice start with some interesting beginnings. But if I can suggest, you should add some kind of opening that actually explains who we are, who certain other characters are in relation to us and what's going on. I spent most of the game confused as to how I should read things because I'm lacking context cues.
Also, Agnes is a terrible name, maybe consider renaming her.
Thanks for the suggestion! I'm glad that you like the first chapter :)
The mysterious things in the game are by design, and as the story goes, all the answers will appear by themselves... Slowly ofcourse. So don't worry, hopefully your questions will be answered as the story goes on.
Agnes is a Greek name meaning "pure" or "holy". It is pretty rare name compared to other characters in the AVNs, so I understand you feel that way :D
If you like the name Agnes, keep it. Not every Agnes is a granny. Those who think so are unaware of people like Agnes Hedengard, who looks like she could be the picture beside the dictionary definition of "fashion model", or Agyness Deyn, who was born as a Laura, but intentionally chose a variation of the name Agnes when she was literally an international supermodel in the 2000s. You're the one doing the work on this story; remember that you have to make something that you enjoy, first and foremost, or else what's the point? Good luck. Be well!
