opening with the word "chronoception" made me know that oh this is gonna be good
Overall, I really liked the writing. Your prose is gentle and pleasant to read, and the imagery spanning across sky and sea and flesh is perf <3
I went down the stairs and the disappointment and hurt and miscommunication conveyed at the conclusion of that arc felt so damn palpable. great job.
Also,, giant red polyhedron.. lmao (affectionate) it actually didn't feel jarring and felt like SUCH a threat. Really cool!
Quotes that went so hard I wanted to highlight them with this comment
- "Existence takes no questions and explains nothing. You are, and that's how it is."
- "Tomorrow's pain will be the same."
Your writing rules >.< Overall, this was so so lovely :3
The only thing I actually wanted to note is that in the last few screens, having music with vocals can make it difficult to read text (at least it's that way for me when I also understand the language sung) Maybe you could consider only fading in vocals when the credits start rolling? But I also very much get the narrative impact of ending it that way, and it did feel really nice~ brain is just fuzzy sometimes nya