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I'm not really sure if I should leave a comment on the new update or not? Cause I believe in you and whatever way you'll push this vn in, and would love to say more! Just unfortunately,  I can't help but say I hated this update. There were parts I liked/found cute, it just got swallowed up by the rest that kinda felt like a punch to the face that left me in confusion and honestly kinda upset.

The new art and sprites I really liked and love looking at them!

The main parts I really liked were the very start, and the very end. With the start, I thought it was cute and sweet to see Finn be the Otaku he is, and the others entertain him with it, even though being bored. With the end, I loved learning more about the worlds lore, and excited to see more of it!

While I love the idea of them exploring places explicitly gay, I'm iffy with this execution. Personally didn't care that it seemed to be a fetish bar, but I couldn't really enjoy the scene with how the love interests seemed really uncomfortable starting on. While yes they seemed to get into it, I could never escape the vibe. While I am being negative, I will admit I really loved being able to leash the two.

And now for the part I really hated. While yes this was full of Otaku love, pulling references and tropes from them(loved the Madoka one). I loved the background they were very beautiful, and added to the scene! They seems cozy and sweet, and I'd like to have seen the a bit! It's just the characters that bothered me.

When it comes to the new characters, the only one of the three I liked was Wei, and I doubt we'll see him again, I hope he fixes his relationship with Tai, and they get a happy ending! Now the other three, I am mixed on how I feel about things, except Jiro fuck him.Rene I honestly didn't care too much, the only noteworthy things, to me, was him pushing Finn's boundaries and immediately trying to throw him to someone who is very clearly a rapist. The white dog, I forgot his name, and really disgusted with his actions. I will admit, I'm very curious about him since he will be very important to the plot at one point or another! Like his design, so can't see what he throws in.

Now my own segment for Jiro and his wife. I'll be honest, I kinda question why he has a wife, cause you could edit her out and nothing would seemingly change. Now on Jiro... I HATE THAT FUCKING BASTARD!!! I had a lot of hope to see someone so important to Mert, who could help explain why Mert is the man he is today... only to turn out to be the anime perverted old man to the worst degree. I mean, what was the point of making him like that??? It felt like the main joke was " Ahah! He wants to rape the love interests!", and it disgusted me. When I got to his part, I had to drop it for a few hours with how disgusted I was with him in general. While don't get me wrong, you're free to write whatever, but I just can't see the point to this characteristic. It'd been different if it was a moment for Finn to step up and try to protect both of them, or to show that whatever going on with Apple is in fact making changes that he should be? While I mentioned the rapist thing a few times, I can't help but hate him for how he treats his staff, especially Wei. He decides he must change everything to taste the LI food, and places Wei's job on the line! I cheered so loud for him when he quit.

Now with the LI, I was excited to see more cute moments, but instead I was worried for their sake cause of what happened in this update. It was just pure discomfort that was really hard to read, and I was tempted on skipping parts of it cause of the horrid taste it left me with. Cause even in the bar, they showed they weren't interested in anyone else there, just thankfully they were more respectful then some certain old men that should be executed via boiling oil. And honestly, I couldn't help be upset with them with the food contest. I understand they want to impress Finn in hopes of romancing him, but I was concerned with how willing they were to get a guy fired for this contest. I am always excited to see a poly route as an option, I love them, just seems kinda strange it still goes poly if you've only focused on only one of them.

While I will admit I may have gone overboard with this review, I've just been loving this story and these characters and I wanna see more! I'm hoping I didn't go too far and be discouraging, I have faith in you and this vn, and I only wish the best. Also, I'm exhausted cause I haven't slept just yet after binging this vn. I don't believe this chapter reflects the vn or who you are as a person, just kinda confusing honestly. I wish you luck and hope for the future of you and your vn!


And looking back on the review, I very well went on for way too long, my bad! 

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Hey! No worries at all, I’m actually really happy you took the time to write such a thoughtful and long comment! Jiro Trope was meant to be like a pervy old anime man, so that’s why he acted that way, but calling him a rapist feels like a bit of an exaggeration. He was more of a comic relief and didn’t actually intend to do anything truly harmful. As for Tome, she took care of Mert when he was a kid and is a really important part of his backstory. And in the bar scene, Mert was just a little embarrassed, it’s not like he disliked it. He definitely enjoyed being there too.

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Either way, I’m really sorry if it made you feel uncomfortable, maybe I didn’t manage to portray everything as clearly as I intended. There won’t be anything like that in the upcoming updates, so I hope you’ll still be interested in continuing the story!

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I do plan on enjoying more, and excited for what comes up next! I will admit, some of the stuff I mentioned were more personal things, but I still stand by what I said for Jiro. If you intended for him to be silly and not actually a rapist,  you might need to work on it. 

Where I'm coming from, is that the two love interests who are shown again and again capable of taking care of themselves, are absolutely terrified of this man, to the point they're actively trying to escape him every chance they get. And he makes it very clear of what he wants, and starts chasing them to the point of the two having to hide from him. Absolutely nothing about Jiro suggest or comes off as him not being serious. Now if it were like he'd say a creepy thing, and got a smack for it, that'd show it more humorous. But no, it's just reactions of horror, and Rene and Finn have to call him out on it.

I will admit I have an extreme heavy bias against this trope, but it seems a little more extreme version

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If that's the case, in the next update, I plan to rewrite that part a bit. After the incident with rajiv, Finn goes to help and convinces Jiro. Then Jiro will apologize and show a bit more of his better side. Do you think that sounds good?

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That’s because I had some issues with the CGs...Finn was supposed to look bigger, but the scenes kept getting messed up, and I changed his size a few times. Those things aren’t that big, haha…

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That definitely sounds like a plan!

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Thanks so much for your comment! I actually have a great plan for that part now, even Tome will be involved, and there’ll be more emotional scenes between him and Mert!! Don’t forget to check out that part again in the next update! 💝

Hi, I hope you’ve read the new update. I finally made a few small changes, and I think it’s better now... thanks to you. 

Your comments have always meant a lot to me and really influenced the game. I don’t know if you’re doing okay or if you’ve just lost interest in the game, but thank you❤

This message is also for a few of the older fans who used to always leave comments, but haven’t shown up in this update...

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I want to say, I'm so thankful to see the edit, it makes it feel a bit better! Also really nice to see a dev take a bit of criticism,  and improve!!! I will admit I may have gone over the top, and I apologize for that. It's just that it felt really jaring to suddenly see. Thoroughly enjoying everything in this new update, added all my favorite things to enjoy even more!!! Always love seeing the boys interact and being cute! Can't wait to see more, and learn about why the white dog(forgot his name, sorry) is so obsessed with Finn. While I think he's cute design wise, holy shit is he nuts(not a complaint btw, he's just caught my eye). 


I've been reading since the beginning, and have no intention to get off this ride anytime soon!!! Whenever I see an update drop, I go ahead and read it the second I can! Even with what I said in the past, I am enjoying this story with my whole heart, and always excited to see what's in store for this story!!! 


P.s. might be weird to suddenly bring up, but will the girls be more involved in the story? Cause I kinda feel bad for them cause they came together, and Finn sorta ditched them after the first day(that, and I wanna see how they react to what the hells going on, especially with how Finn is suddenly finding himself in a throuple with some more guys possibly being interested in him)

I’m really happy to hear all this, I was really looking forward to your comment and thoughts. Feedback means a lot to me!

As for the girls, they don’t show up for now, but they’ll play a key role in the critical parts of the story!!

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The pery old anmie man is very difficult to write. The line between comic relief and plain glorified sexual assault is extremly thin. I am glad that you may change Jiro's Restaurant Scenes later. 

Maybe less touching and more teasing remarks? 

It should also be part with Jiro actuall needs and personality. Does he want to get touched, cuddled, loved and admired by others (despite his age) ?  That is easier and morally save when the other option: He likes to grab others and assume control in Sex, showing of his Strengh/Endurance and that the old men still got it. 

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Whaaaat? Jiro is the man!