good points: Amazing game!! i love ren and the whole aesthetic of the game! specially the customization and the whole glitching thing (the sound of the letters scratches my brain real nice)
i also LOVE the art and how all the girls are so sweet😭🫶🏻
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i also really like how ren “talks” in the dead ends, i think it makes the game much more interesting! the red letters! how the letters shook and the “jumpscare” of the “it” thing ren refers to? i REALLY like it><❤️
bad points/suggestions: what really setts me off the most is the writing, sometimes it’s really cringey, SPECIALLY the nsfw scenes—it felt like a wattpad story, and how most of it happens with a black screen i think it emphasizes that, i couldn’t even imagine anything because it was very…bland, and the “dirty talk” is really, really, bad, it’s very standard and sometimes plain embarrassing (and not because it has sexual undertones lol). I think giving more details, images and richer words would make it better. If you look up some nsfw romance japanese games you can see that some doesn’t even have a lot of “””vulgar””” language, but its detailed and they describe a lot of emotions/feelings which gives the readers a feeling of immersion and butterflies on your stomach haha (but that’s just my opinion!)
what really made me look it up was the romance, nsfw and yandere part (which i dont know many games with such categories together) which is why i was kind of disappointed:( i like the overall story and the designs, as well as the choices! but the writing feels very forceful and simplistic, specially the ones with her friends from college and ren, honestly the best and not forced/cringe talks/relationships in my opinion was with teo and all the girls.
again to the nsfw part, why can’t we “active” that feature unless we do it on the first day? my suggestion is that we can trigger it even on other days too! it even feels more natural:)
also, maybe you can add a small reminder that when you’re picking certain choices it will affect ren’s appearance? or major changes? (not story related of course, only regarding appearances or the way you’ll be perceived)
i don’t know if it’s because it’s still a demo but ren doesn’t really feel like a yandere to me, only a clingy boy tbh (or maybe that’s just your intention haha)
also, it’s not a bad point but i think making us readers know about what he’s muttering about while the mc doesn’t kind of takes the “suspense” and immersion out of it? it’s just a suggestion but i think it would make the players more interested if you let them know JUST some words of what he’s murmuring (ex: i think…that…pretty…) or something like that lmao it’s a pretty shitty example but i think you get it? or just revealing what he’s talking about sometimes instead of all the time? maybe write something like “he’s murmuring something to himself” instead of revealing everything? i think it keeps the mystery of the character and makes the readers more curious, but this is mainly my preference:)
overall: i really like the game actually! specially considering how its for free:) thank you for making this^^ i can see it has a lot of effort put it in it!! i think my main problem would be with the writing but that’s just my opinion, please don’t think i’m offending you or anything!!!😭 it’s just some things that has been on my mind while i played^^ thank you for your hard work!! i’ll def play your full game too!! please don’t feel pressured and take care of yourself <3 (sorry for any mistakes english is not my first language)