Gorgeous art. Music is good but looped a bit too often for how long it was being played, I can still hear Lil Jon screaming at me as I write this. Dialogue pauses were pauses for an excruciating amount of time; I get wanting pauses for pacing, but I'm not used to a VN deciding to take control of the pace to this level of an extent without having some sort of choreographed animation or sound or some other moment as the reason for the delay.
As pointed out, I barely noticed the usual Ren'Py UI elements were even present (and I did have to make use of back a few times, for some reason some of the choices were weirdly hitchy and laggy and just decided to choose themselves, which would feel appropriate if not for it being one of the earliest options going)
The writing is phenomenal. Loved it all, including the ~mystery narrator~. Felicity sure is a character. (and I don't even know what I mean by saying that, but whatever he is, he is the most.) The coffee order nearly killed me.
I was actually kind of taken aback to see it end, even though for a jam game this already runs on the longer side (such is the nature of a VN). I would absolutely be intrigued to see this expanded upon somehow.