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I'm sorry to say this but the game was kind of disappointing to me. The beginning was alright, although it made you pick who to hang out with before you even really got to like anyone. I liked the background story of the characters do, it sounded like you really thought about it. But then the ending came so sudden. You are just talking too a couple people and BAM suddenly you are getting raped next to a corpse. That guy didn't even seem so bad yet. Just a annoying boss. I think this could have been a good story, but is just feels like the middle part of the story disappeared. You go straight from the introduction to the ending. I'm not trying to be mean or anything. I think commentary is helpful to writers, so they can improve themselves. I hope it helped you.

Thanks for your feedback, I always appreciate constructive criticism. My excuse for the bad pacing is my lack of focus. The problem you pointed out is something i'm well familiar with, and have been trying to steer in the right direction for quite some time now, but it's hard for me to do that because I just want to finish the project as fast as possible because if I take my time, then I will start getting lazy and stop writing for I am doing with my current project. As I have said in previous replies, I will do my best to fix the issues and make an actual good visual novel...someday.

Have a great day