Love the demo so far. It is a cute vn/dating sim. I like the cheeky humor in it as well. Reading over the content, I can see how some sentences can be expanded or strengthened for more depth and/or better flow. Since it is for Bara is there a certain time line in which the game must be produced? Are you doing all the written edits yourself? The game has me curious!! :)
I cannot wait for the final product. Good job thus far.