*WARNING SPOILER*

I loved this story, it kept my interest the whole time. I must say I did feel a little envious of Doug in the ways his sis cared about him and how he had a friend who was willing to help him through whatever he was going through.

I did feel a little disappointed that you killed off the Doug's sis (I said spoiler). And it did hurt to keep going without my favorite character being in the story, but still overall this was amazing. I felt all kinds of emotions the whole time.

I feel anger against flamethrower girl, which was probably what you wanted, but I thought she was pretty interesting when we first met her. Her love interest in Doug was a bit deranged and the fact that she may or may not have been lying to Doug the whole time was interesting (and because of that I personally think that if you were to make a backstory for her as like a side show, it would be interesting to learn about her).

Overall, I thank you for the amazing story and I'll be sure to think on it for a while.