If I have to be 100 percent honest I'd say this is one of the best demos for a VN I've ever played. Seriously. It was detailed, the story was nicely written, the world building was done well and in general the character designs and backgrounds were solid. One critique I would have that is more personal than a problem with this game in general is the very young ages of all of the characters. I just couldn't suspend my belief that a 16 year old would be the head maid at a castle, or that a 20 year old could become a captain of the royal guard. It's more my own want for realism rather than some horrible problem or something so I wouldn't worry about it too much if I were the creator. No, if I were the creator, I would be absolutely proud of this long and stunning demo. I'd love to see it finished!
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