I am just in chapter 3.. but so far the writing is very juvenile. I'll keep reading and see if it improves and then i'll update this.

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So I read a bit more.. I figured out that English isn't your first language and I think that is the reason the writing is this way, which is fair. There is a lot of mistakes, too many for it to be worth listing them all. I also think because of your limited English vocabulary, the overall story suffers. A lot of the characters come across as quite simple minded, they lack depth and a bit of realism.

That being said, I think the art has a lot of character, even if a lot of the character's faces and bodies are quite similar in shape, they are still pretty distinctive.