Short demo but has some nice premise and could lead to a very nicely developed game. I feel like the writing is a bit quick paced and the game don't really need to have a "narrator" speaking role for the narrative moments but this is minor details and can be considered nitpicky.

That being said a major detail would be the sheer size of the textbox. It's way too big and hide most of the visuals in addition of making it a bit silly floating mid screen. 

I will be reviewing my judgment once the game update or fully release and I do believe it can very nicely be improved.