Not even saying this because you're a homie, but it's so easy to immerse in a story when it's clear that the creator cares for it. Using RenPy's capabilities and your own art to solidify tone is the point of visual novels, and this one was able to capitalize on that even with its shortness. Only real critique is just how Lala's description of Xia has a sexual subtext that's distracting (for a blink), but the game's direction is still clear and convincing from Lala's disposition and the endings. I'm sorry for JUST NOW thinking of this suggestion but I think it'd be cool if (to emphasize the illusion of choice) the choice that unlocks the third ending was the only option that appeared and states something like "Leave; fulfil your new purpose", as it further shows that your memories are being manipulated and u can't undo what has already been done. Other than that, this is a beautifully short passion project that showcases your versatility as not only an author but also VN creator.