I like the art and the world-building, as well as Ranzkai (who I think single-handedly carries this VN). But the other characters in this VN are quite boring. Not only that, but the other characters don't seem to have much of a sense of connection with each other. The story would be improved if characters would say something along the lines of "what do you think?" to each other every so often. Otherwise, it's more like every character is just giving long monologues while in each others' presence.
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