Though wordy, this
never felt overwrought or bogged down with too much exposition and the
narrator has a refreshingly teenage cut to her internal monologue. A lot
of the passages were understandably rough but didn't feel voyeuristic.
Interspersing
narrative text with flickering details (e.g. clicking on a word to
illuminate more information) and epistolary fragments (Hanna's chatlogs)
is something I love about Twine work and I really appreciated its use
in this story.
I think this is a very promising start and can't wait to see more from this writer—I especially appreciated the in-depth afterword where their influences were discussed, and the user-friendly skipping functions were deployed extremely well.
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