OK, well, the biggest problem overall is, this doesn't even qualify as a "game" because there are no choices. It's no different from reading a regular book with pretty pictures. If there's not a CYOA element to it, then it can't rightly qualify as a game, and I came here to play a game, not read a book.

And the biggest problem with the story is one of verisimilitude. If the protagonist is Davis' boss, then it would be very inappropriate to have any kind of relationship with him outside of work. I know that in my job, if a supervisor had any kind of relationship with a worker outside of work, even just going out for the occasional beer after quitting time, management would immediately reassign that worker to a different unit. Because when bosses and their underlings have extra-professional relationships, it causes professional problems. So that's just not realistic.

The second problem is that I'm just not buying Davis as the bull in a cuckolding relationship. I mean, look at him. He's a fucking twink! The bull needs to be a big, tough-looking guy. Preferably a big, tough-looking BLACK guy. Additionally, Davis makes an especially poor bull because of his inferior status to the protagonist at work. (Which also brings my above point back up.) It would be understandable if Davis outranked the protagonist and was thus able to exert pressure on him, but with the protagonist outranking Davis, it makes even less sense. (Though, granted, if Davis was a big, tough-looking black guy, the rank issue would be irrelevant.)

But there's good things, too. The art is good. Kayleigh is freaking hot, and she would make a dream-come-true Mistress, especially as the bull in a lesbian-cuckolding situation. And the writing and grammar are good. I see SO MANY games with such shitty grammar, it's refreshing to see one written by somebody who knows how to articulate a complete sentence. And the interface is very user-friendly. (It's Renpy, right?)

But despite these plusses, the problems, especially the first one I mentioned, make this "game" unplayable. It could be turned into something good with some work, though.