Love your writing style—lots of fun banter and witty narration. The scenes are well paced, the art is hella cute, and the character dynamics so far have me vry excited for some found family type spacecrew drama. (Getting The Expanse vibes from this, and I love those books to death!)
I'm usually not too interested in RPG-lite or non-kinetic visual novels, but this one I'll definitely keep my eyes on. Great first build!
Edit: One suggestion; I think an option to show the -+'s to character mood as it changes in script might prevent some frustration. As someone who'll always pick the funny and obviously negative roleplay decisions first, it's nice to know when said choice has numerical consequences attached, rather than it just being flavor.
The rewrite is going in such an amazing direction—I'm so damn impressed, seriously. Scipio is sucha fun little weirdo, and Virginia's side plot is fantastic! So much tension! Aya is also the perfect character type to slot in to the group and I love her???? Uhghghgg. I'm obsessed.
Love the writing, love how ballsy the first chapter was, love the crack fic vibes. The dialogue is very natural and ya got a great choice in sound design and the visuals/sprites are very cute too.
My one big complaint is the itch page. I'd rather have a comprehensive list of trigger warnings to expect throughout the whole VN instead of chapter summaries, so that the narrative can surprise me rather than advertising "chpt2 won't have x or y", which can take away some of the suspense.
I'm also curious what genres will this cover? Namely if it'll have romance as a plot or subplot, and if so, will there be routes or will it be kinetic? Will it be m/m? mono or poly? I get some of this might be spoilers but usually that kinda stuff's advertised from the start. Alsoooo I can't find the patreon link!
Loved it! Sawyer and Jude have sucha fun, sad dynamic that is very tasty so far, and I'm excited to read more about them and their heisty ghosthunter-type crew goin into the weirdo zone. The world building is neat, districts and such, the mystery wells, and ill have to see how merit/charter magicsystem works but that could be fun too. Only mild complaint id have is some prose at the start is a lil stiff/repetitive, some scenes could be shortened or use a b plot within em to add some spice, and maybe just a smiiiidge more subtlety w/ jude's inner dialogue in the first couple scenes might feel better.
Can't wait to read more tho! pls no hiatus i beg u!
the character writing is impressive! everyone has a very strong voice and lots of depth. I usually simp for the big bara boys, but Hiro completely stole my heart <3.
as for the plot, this project is looking ambitious AF. Seriously. Each route seems to be working with a ton of different genres and plot threads, which is cool to see, even if it ends up a little muddled sometimes.
