
Such fun and lovely writing! I'm sorry to say the bad guy is gonna get me good, and the only reason I haven't been got yet is bc I ran out of words to read. So excited to see what you're cooking!
Excited to see more! And cannot wait to see some people get what they deserve 👀 hope all's well, author!
Some potential edits:
I think you might've meant "deaf," unless you were implying our girl Eloise had skilled hearing? ;)
*through
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Possible coding error when Marcella and Julian get ready to head to market.
I cannot believe how romantic this sex-heavy game is, like, I'm taken aback. You have such a fun and immersive writing style! I'd love to know more about how you came to hone your craft.
Additionally, I'm dying over the warlord joke and the later mention in the heretic route. As of the most recent update (like an hour ago, so hell yeah), there are a few repetitive passages during the last available night. I also believe I saw a stray "her" when referring to V very early on in the story; perhaps a mistyped reference to MC's gender?