right i loved Rich's self denial even though he knew most likely that his fears/suspicions were true! and all that foreshadowing...
the way you've spun this all to max out the thriller part really adds to the horror and disgust, not like tension before a jump scare, but like failing some big exams which is a nightmare that can't be woken up from, just keeps going and going, trapped in it with the reality pressing in, i LOVE IT