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It was indeed a typo. When it comes to me, I am a natural English speaker so it's more just accidentally pressing something on a keyboard. It was meant to be obnoxious and I must not have realised. My apologies for any confusion caused.

I understand that it isn't something you can do at the moment. Finding a good proof-reader could be expensive, and right now a lot of people don't have the money they used to. Paying for rent etc. is to be expected but now with the COVID outbreak a lot of people have lost their jobs. So they're not going to have as much money free to put towards Kickstarters, Patreon etc.

I do hope that things get better for you financially. Obviously my point of view is somewhat selfish as I'm soneone interested in the game and want it to be completed. But you do have to put yourself first before anything else.

When it comes to audio, a lot of indie visual novels like this on Itch seem to just license music using creative commons if the developer can't afford to hire a composer. So you could always just go the Kevin MacLeod route like a lot of other people. I'm not an expert on copyright, so I'd recommend just googling if an idea like that interested you.

I used saves to go through all the little Christmas variations, which definitely caught me off guard at first. It makes sense in hindsight realising that update would've been released around the holidays. It being a dream sequence makes sense, so unfortunately the protagonist didn't get the kiss they wanted from *insert love interest of your choice here*.

I didn't like my past feedback so decided to try posting again.

I've played until the end of the beginning chapter (so just after the interrogation) and the biggest problem so far is the many typos in the game. Plus some weird phrasing that doesn't sound natural in English. This is natural since it isn't your first language and you're working on your own. Still, I would suggest eventually hiring a proof-reader to look over the script and weed a lot of these typos out.

At first I kinda just assumed the game would be set in Hollywood because movie studios, but it ended up being in the UK instead which is nice. If characters using words like bloody set off my radar an underground mention made it concrete for me.

I won't comment on the WIP art or lack of music since the game is very much still in development. I hope making this goes well for you, especially since we're all going through rough times right now.

I'm not a game dev expert but I assume this was likely made in Ren'py. If so, I would like to see a log added so you can look at/ reference past dialogue. I realise that if you're going for a more detective style visual novel, this might conflict with wanting the player to remember things rather than just look back. But given that some people like myself make way too many saves, that might be a problem either way.

I guess if I'm complaining about typos, I should actually point some out and help. When something is going to happen for a certain period of time, it's temporary; not temporal. During the interrogation scene, you're asked if Hayley had a boyfriend. One of the answers is that you saw her with Blayke when it should be Blake.

I'm looking forward to future updates of the game. Hopefully I haven't come off as obnovious. I was actually a little worried about posting feedback.

Just wanted to say that despite the search for funding not being successful, I do hope you manage to make this game in the future. 

Obviously with the COVID epidemic everyone involved will have more important things on their mind than game development. But I would love to see a finished game eventually, even if it takes a lot of time.

Can definitely say I wouldn't complain about those failed stretch goals still ending up in the game either.