A lot of ground got covered in two pages. Well done for fitting a delve in though of course, you've had to lean into parts of it. As an expanded product, I bet this would be incredible.
As it is, its very creative, pulling in some unique ideas into the tests/setting.
That art piece is a delight! Real give a sense of theme and colour to the game this supplement can be used for. Can't be critiqued, but well done.
A good blend of storytelling, group bonding, and with some fun abilities (I can see one of my players shouting: 'Throw him into my Fist!') there is some good design on show here, perfect for the right sort of table.
The control that the Kirin can implement through Charged is really good design. I thought it could be well worked into the Stormsoul Bow, but what you have done with that as well is great.
Some really good battle altering mechanics here. I like 'There’s No Cheating Time' but I feel if you have something that can target the Shadow Class, maybe some abilities that go after other classes as well. A real fun dragon all in all, and the seasonal shifting is a great touch.
You had me going in the first half. Like, how is this in theme, then BAM! Second page of theme. A really interesting concept for a psionic/region spirit. Ancestry seems well balanced enough, but I am all about that Rival.
This guy is savage! Such a well put together titan. So many ideas bubble through my brain on how I could work in, or develop a game to fit such a monster. The End is the exact sort of evocative, and game changing ability I'd want from an End Boss. Great work.
Snuffed Out is a really fun reskinning of what I think is a Hobgoblin passive? May have it wrong. Armor of Wax is also really creative, and something I will happily be stealing. Good work.
Damn. There is a lot more to fishing then I ever thought there could be. I must keep this supplement hidden from 2 of my players. They would love the complexity, depth, and detail of this too much and melt my brain! Haha.
In all seriousness, your passion really shines through in this supplement.
A good concept that can really help players feel more connect to the world. I can totally see this being worked into my game as something the players all do after the end of Downtime activity, before they return to the action.
Though it isn't part of the rating, the art you have used for this supplement is great. Really well chosen. As others have said, I'd signpost to my players that they need to fail to win the montage test, or lay it differently myself for my table.
The write up has wonderful references, and Embris is a great encounter. Totally going to be taking them for my game.
The subtle colouring for each really works for me. Along with this think they are great downtime activities. I particularly like Tend a Garden and Go Hunting. I'd personally rework Mourning. Kind of makes Winter feel bad? Maybe have it as a wider remembrance, good and bad, like a New Years Celebration.
Just my two cents. I'll be adding these into my game regardless.
There is so much ground covered in this supplement. Such a different way to look at the Fury. Maybe not something to give to all players new to the game as it seems quite complex.
Or....
Have a player access to say 3 of the Signs to begin with, unlocking more on their questing. I'm thinking like Jackie Chan Adventures.
I like it. Simple to execute, with a system that becomes easy to use once done a few times. For my own sake, I'd appreciate a rough guide of how many times a life event can be advanced through. I.e, how many times can I roll a negative for Romantic Partner, before it ends in a nil result. Understand that the size of the doc prevented this, but if you expanded this concept work (dare I say with flow charts) ;ater on, I'd love to see more of it.
The Clown face for the Stat blocks is superb. I'm not sure how I would employ them, but if I were running a spooky creepy oneshot, these would be the Fools I'd employ!
The mount, the balloon animals all really work well to make these an effective group of enemies if faced as a collective. Well done for cramming so much into a few pages.
What could be a very spooky tree. I'd look to rework its fluff for my setting, but there is a lot of good design in this submission for any Director to use.
For a certain type of campaign or one shot, this is an amazing supplement! I'm talking cooking battle/competiton Anime style stories, with competing bands of chefs! It writes itself.
So very creative, with loads crammed into 2 pages.
I love the Masque of Reaping. I feel I'd want the Blooming Shilleleagh to have more of a 'global'/whole battlefield effect throughout, it being a spring rain, but balance for that would be difficult.
Beautifully presented. Where did you get/what software did you use, to make your borders?
A lovingly presented submission. It really has its own style, and is a concept I never would have thought of. I don't know how I would fit them in my game, but these Piñotls are a delight.
The Phase Runner is a great kit concept well executed. The other items I feel I could work into a game with a bit of tightening up. The Mirror Blade seems great for a Time Raider Assassin, but not sure if it would vibe with my players.
Captivation is such a clever condition. Well done. You've also applied good concise writing for cover two monsters in one page. Time Aura is such a good 'yes but' ability too.
Superbly written, and adds real depth to the exotic Fae. I would have appreciated a line in the doc to confirm the purpose of the supplement, but that is a minor niggle.
A creative way of breaking down the title of the Jam. I really like the Surprise Party Downtime. Can totally see myself pulling all but one player into this out of game, to align it to a players actual birthday with that of their characters.
Knock Into Next Week is such a great ability that ties into this type of Fury so well. Well kept to the theme of the Jam, and just a fun take on the class.
A great submission. I got the chance to proof read it, and knew then it would be a strong contender in this Jam. The art really pulls the theme together. Love to see one of the Iconic Heroes in it.
Really useful for a game. I'd absolutely have my villain either capture, or just straight up kill an Apprentice at an appropriate moment, to really get my players out for their blood. Wahaha!
You crammed so much into this two page submission, that ties perfectly into the theme. Good work. Very useable for a certain type of game. I see a 3 Men and a Baby type montage in this fun supplement.
The subtle colour changes on the text really work for me in this piece. I can easily see how I would work this in for a elf character, or one who has heavy ties to the Fey in general. I'd maybe cut/give the option to have the states linked to the season your game is in. Slower changes/fewer chances to see the abilities, but easier to track I feel.
