Would be good if you could add the tag that the game is female mc only. Went in thinking that I can choose my gender like some of your other works.
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i love that you've added selectable pronouns, however think you need to do a bit more for players to play m or nb mc's. Mostly because it keeps being described that the mc is wearing a dress, changes into another dress and has a whole wardrobe full of what I assume to be dresses. While I love for my m mcs to occasionally wear a dress every now and then, this kinda took me out of it and think that the clothes should either be left as ambiguous describing rich fabric ect or the player should choose the clothes the mc is wearing with an option of more 'feminine', 'gender ambiguous' or 'masculine' clothing.
okay this looks like possibly a fault on my end, the link was on the I part of “I am sure,” he assures you, and my eyes weren't able to see that it was blue as the letter was so small compared to the rest of the text. Maybe I suggest highlighting another part of the text for the link to make it clearer for the reader?
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So im playing chapter 4 on the ulrich solo route but theres just not an option to click to the next page after this:
"We'll make it through," he says, voice low and steady, a counterpoint to Tala's fervour. There's a look in his pale eyes that you have come to recognize as fondness.
He catches your gaze for a moment, and something unspoken passes between you.
“I am sure,” he assures you.
Yeah, it's gonna take some time for my mc to actually like these people. He's been kidnapped (and was freaking out when a bunch of criminals took him forcibly to a second location, bc you should never let kidnappers take you to a second location), and coerced. Also didn't really appreciate his new 'team members' 'just playing a game' and scamming a minimum wage worker who will probably be made to pay the difference of whats been stolen or end up being fired. Everyone seems terrible, from Jonna and KJ to the crew. I came in wanting to play some fun be gay and do crimes stuff but everyone seems pretty tone death. The mc to me just seems too much of a normal smuck to get involved with this to have a good time and jump all in from all of the backgrounds provided (sans the more morally grey one of selling solen goods) - maybe if there was more choices of more 'wild' and morally grey backgrounds but having the mc being something as plain as a uni dropout or someone coming out of a emotionally draining relationship just doesn't seem to be the mc to have a good time with all this.
Bonding with the crew doesnt seem to be working right now, and I feel like there has to be something big to happen where the mc is majorly shafted by Jonna to actually get into the insurance fraud/car theft. The Mc right now just feel's like to much of a normie outsider to really vibe with what the crew has going on to me.
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I hate to be that guy and correct me if I'm completely wrong and out of line - BUT if youre talking about the words 'white knuckled' or having 'white knuckles' its not literally describing the mc's skin tone - it's a common term used to describe displaying or characterized by extreme excitement or fear. I think it's called 'white' because when you clench your fist hard enough, you can actually see the knuckle bone. But yeah, in interactive fiction with no set description I think these are phrases that you should probably be wary of when youre writing, like the phrase 'turning red' when describing a character blushing or 'turning blue' if a characters cold