Hey thanks for pointing it out! I'll go double check. Sometimes saves don't like new variables when they're added after the fact, so that might be on my end and sometimes I just frick it up lol
As for the timer, yeah I'll look at it. I've had a couple people tell me already that it was too long.
ETA: I'm not quite sure what's going on with the either of the errors. They both work just fine for me. It's possible that I added that first variable to chapter 2 while working on chapter 3, so your save doesn't know what it's looking at. It's not going to break anything long term, it's just going to give you the bare variable.
As for the "NAN" error... yeah, I don't know lol. It might also be because of your save file (variables just don't like to play nice sometimes). Again, it shouldn't break anything long term (I think it's trying to read a variable I ended up taking out of the game but not out of the info tab).
The pronoun variables dont work in the links. Theres a way to fix it but i noticed it pretty late so i settled for they/them. I'll try to fix it for the next update. Though I do notice one that I missed so I'll fix that too
The flashback was mostly meant to shuffle together a lot of different information that would have been clunky to work into actual dialogue: that Carter was formerly part of MAB, that he's retired from them, and his general opinion/disposition toward them even before meeting the MC.
But I see where you're coming from. I'll keep that in mind in the future. Thanks for leaving a comment and reading!
Ah, alas, we'll just have to rely on Carter to be our dad and not our daddy.
Anyway: You'll just have to wait to meet Z lol
You will be able to choose Kestrel's gender, no worries.
I haven't decided quite yet how far things will get intimacy wise. I'd lean toward it being more adult, but at this point I'm not making any promises either way. Odds are this will end up being more of a series of stories so we'll just see how things land
I'm not really sure what other descriptors I'll add for the MC. Probably height at least (if only for the eventual comparison with the LI) and maybe some others.
You are an adorable little ray of sunshine. Thanks so much for the in depth review. I really appreciate it and I'm glad you had fun reading this.
I will look into whether or not Sugarcube allows for the reader to set the font. I'm still extremely new to all of this. I've actually been back and forth about the font for a while, since I know sans-serif fonts are supposed to be easier to read. It was just one of those things that fell by the way side, though I will probably change it.
lol And I'm especially glad you like the new banner as I literally just changed it to that one a few hours ago. I hope you like the new UI changes that are coming with chapter 2 (hopefully just as easy to read, I'll keep an ear out for any complaints though. You can see previews of it in the screenshots).
Also I laughed a lot at your mention of Kestrel. I have a feeling they'll be very popular overall.
