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Really enjoyed how you crafted the feel for both the setting and the internal world of the protagonist. The way things are delivered through layered lenses of perception (Protagonist afflicted with inner turmoil -> Rave subculture -> cyberpunk dystopia) is well done and engaging, and imo has some of that impressionist touch of Gibson's writing.

Thumbs up!

It's real in parts, it's rough in some edges. I'm glad I read it overall. I think that the story could benefit a lot from a slower escalation of stakes, to really savor the push-pull of a toxic relationship, but given the time constraints of a game jam's it's good.

I think there's a raw emotional core to this story that rings true, and with enough polish can become something that packs a real good punch to the gut. I see and appreciate the intent, congratulations on putting it out.