That was lovely! The voice acting made the characters so much sweeter, and both of them did a phenomenal job. 🥰 I tend to speed through fully voiced stories, but I liked that lots of the inner monologue/narrator was quiet. When the voices popped in, I wanted to stop and listen, like they were a special treat. A very sweet story; I love a warm fuzzy romantic ending.
I think my one critique would be to cut down 50% of the screen shakes, like mostly saving them for stuff like Christina's health episodes. I'm biased 'cause this was my approach so take with a grain of salt, but replacing them with sprite-specific transformations would work for smaller dramatic effects so that the whole scene doesn't shake as much.
Their relationship is so powerful. 😭💕 I love love love stories about meeting one important person who changes your life for the better. Like every bad thing leading up to them led you to them, I think. I wish the best for both of them, and I hope Inori heals from all she's had to face, with Aulie's help. ❤
The artwork was so lovely, I don't even know where to start. I loved the vast expressions, the CGs, everything.
Omg it came out great! 🥰 Knowing the character art you were working with, I love how you made so many edits to match the story! Lumi was a precious little cinnamon roll in Skye's arms. I really liked the music choices and sound effects. The background assets were perf, too. Lots of color coordination all around. Thanks so much for collabing!
I struggle with words for darker stories because if I say "what a depressing story" it like... almost sounds like a bad thing, but I don't mean it that way. 😅 But it had an uplifting end to it. I was kinda suspicious of the boyfriend the whole time just because his sprite was obscured, but I'm glad he just ended up being a sweetie.
I wish we could've interacted with the NPCs, or at least the second one. I kinda thought the friend would have something to say, if that was her at the second desk.
I kinda wish mouse controls would let me go between maps; it seemed like they only triggered with arrow keys, and I got confused trying to leave the house in the beginning. 😆 I think this was RPG maker? I think I've seen other games that used RPG maker have an arrow sprite pop up when you're near an exit tile. Something like that might've made indoor exits more clear.
Overall, I thought you did well. The color palette well-suited the melancholy-ness of the story.
(spoilers)
I got two endings, and out of morbid curiosity, I kept trying to trigger a "worst ending," but either there isn't one or I couldn't figure it out. I don't think this needed a dark ending by any means. But since the map is there, maybe it could've used one last line from Maryanne on that map telling us that there's nothing to do, else I wouldn't have kept checking tiles, wondering why the map was accessible at all. 😅 I think the sprite that spawns if you go there immediately was an interesting change that prompted more exploring, but it may have been a little misleading since there wasn't anything beyond that.
Thank you for finishing it and for the feedback! I agree that the beginning is unfortunately tough to get through. 😥Maybe one of those "I swear, give it 5 episodes" kind of stories. It's one reason the Bonus Scenes were separated from the main story; I really wanted to write them and I think they add to the lore, but they would've slowed down the story even more. Thanks for letting me know that there are good moments in later parts. 🥰
The green heart is actually the dislike meter. 😅 I think Eidan is the easiest to accidentally annoy, but I remember I wanted Victor to be overly sensitive in some of his choices, so that checks out. The Dislike meter exists because I originally wanted to make a Hate route for everybody, but the game was getting too long, and worse so it was already buggy. 😵
If you're curious about which choice it was, the Advice toggle usually says which choices cause Dislike points. But admittedly, the only changes across in multiple playthroughs are just different character responses. Unless anyone's invested in more dialogue, there isn't a lot of reason to go back. 😓 But just in case, there's a whole guide here: https://papersak.com/zenocelproject/guide
It's really sweet! I liked the soft muted palette in all the graphics/artwork, the music was cute, and the gameplay was straightforward. I was nervous about making mistakes, but I like that there was enough wiggle room to get the good ending.🥰
You mentioned in the notes that both characters were based on yourself, and I think that's what made them more relatable. I liked helping Trip redeem himself by paying more attention to Nabi and how Nabi gives him a chance after seeing his struggle up close. I liked that even though Tripp envies Nabi's job, he realizes that even a stable job can be a draining struggle. That felt too relatable. 😓
And of course, the whole thing circling back to game dev hitting home for anyone who wants their work to be seen. 😅 I'm happy they worked together in the end. Great job.
Hoooooooooly crap this game is hard. 😵Like... too hard to even finish the tutorial song.
I'm used to rhythm games where the notes are in lanes, positions correlating to where they physically are. But I imagine this takes inspiration from Project Diva. I swear I've played that, too, albeit never at the hardest level, and the colors/shapes of the notes help distinguish which buttons to push. I think my main critique/ask here is: please make the tutorial use fewer keys. Maybe only the one line of keys for someone just starting out? Or maybe something like, color the keys to which line they are (red is qwerty, green is asdf, etc) so they're easier to tell apart?
I think there's potential to entice players who want a really difficult game! And I did click on this because "the entire keyboard" is such a wild, interesting idea. But I also think the first level could be less um... demoralizing. 😅It's completely understandable if this all gets ignored 'cause playtesters have already figured this game out; have a nice day.
Thank you so much for this first, lovely comment. 🥹
The art has been such a roadblock in finishing the game. 😆 I've had to cut CGs down, since I really want to get to the ending. I think making a few images good will be better than making a lot of images poorly. 😅 But the main sprites already went through a massive overhaul since I started.
I've heard of Coffee Talk, but I never found time to play it. I'm kind of flattered it makes someone think of a big game like that. 🥰 I think Nekopara ~Catboys Paradise~ was largrly what prompted the character designs and the otome-friendship, slice of life spirit. I definitely want to credit Pokemon Masters (Trainer Lodge) and Persona for a lot of the inspiration, too.
At least, for the gameplay. For the story, I wanted to tell something similar to how my friends got me out of my comfort zone, and how I never could've imagined the amazing experiences I would later have after the lowest points in my life. 😅 Meeting someone with a tail wouldn't even surprise me anymore.
I'm glad you liked the characters! I think I know somebody better when they describe their favorite characters (which is why this is the correct choice in Ravi's route 😆). I'm glad they all seem unique. Celia was someone I struggled writing because she's intentionally not like me, and I'm happy that there are people who appreciate how friendly she is. Victor was one of the first character designs, and he went through a big redesign so more of his character traits would be reflected.
It would not hurt my feelings if the player muted the music. 😆 I think, as a developer, I've heard these songs too many times from testing, and I do worry that I should gather a few more songs. Music is where I have to leave it up to people with years of experience, because I have none. 😵 But I'm testing the ending, and once I'm able to update, I promise that that song in the last scene will be worth unmuting. It's another (currently unused) Keys of Moon song that makes me emotional even without the art. 🥲
Thanks for playing!! I hope you have time to try it again once the game is finished. Either way, I'm happy you already found so much to say about it. 🥰 It makes me hopeful that somebody else will like it.
I love how you used Ren'Py here! All the moving sprites and dynamic chat bubbles gave the story a lot of pizazz. I actually like that it was a linear story with a canon ending. I think if I had to make choices here, I would've gone bonkers trying to get the other endings or felt conflicted about the true ending.
I think the characters were fun. Trevor was my favorite. He just seemed to end up in the wackiest situations from the bully to the cat allergy, and he handled them all in true nerd fashion. The length of the story was perfect for my preference (I think it was close to an hour).
I liked Cynthia's struggle with her childlike fantasy and trying to push it into her past, but her dream ended up being useful after all. Personal preference, but I wish the big fight had been a 3-person effort, because I wanted to see some of Rose and Trevor's dynamic. Overall, it was a wholesome, nicely written story that displays a lot of creativity with the Ren'Py engine.
I appreciate how straightforward the story is. I only managed to get 2 endings, but I think I got a feel for Aya's character from that. The story is purely what it sets out to be: a girl working up the courage to overcome her insecurities. And her design is cute; can't have too much pink.
My main criticism is the minigame portion. I knew the colors were flashing depending on the answer, but I couldn't make sense out of why x was green or why y was blue etc, nor did I figure out what color corresponded to what ending until getting said ending. I thought I was stuck in a loop for a minute. 😥 My strategy was to keep picking the same color as many times as I could find it, whatever that color was.
Part of me would've preferred a single choice (per random section) that went straight to the next part. 😅 Or maybe finite/linear choices that are added up at the end.
Kaito seems like a cool dude. I'm happy for Aya in the end. 😊
I stream Wednesday nights (US Central) on Twitch at https://twitch.tv/papersak ! It's usually art, so I think a relaxing little gecko would suit it. 🥰
Omg I love this gecko art and animation so much 🥺💕 the way the little tongue follows the mouse is too precious
It did freeze once on the gecko eating a fly. I think I had it on for an hour or two, and it happened while I wasn't paying much attention. I was still able to exit without force closing it, but the game just wouldn't progress at all. I've had it on for another hour or two today, and it's still running fine. Not sure if there's a crash log that would still be around for debugging, but it wasn't detrimental to me or anything. I'm playing the Windows version.
This is so cute, though; I wanna put this on the corner on stream or something 🥰
I finally had time to play 2/4 routes! I was really excited not just from the designs, but because you sounded so passionate about the characters and giving them depth on Reddit and stuff. 🥰 The CGs are precious and extra special. I'm excited for more of them!
I really like Rosea! Her design is beautiful. I wanna protect her from all these nasty magic surprises. 🥺 I hope we get more of her backstory! I imagine there's a lot to unpack, and I like the pace at which the stories reveal the past.
(vague/fun spoilers)
and you CAN'T just
give me a strong man with nice abs and a pet bird (the cutest bird)
and say he's "actually sensitive" and give him a hug CG
and not expect me to be powerless. 😭💕 that's so many oddly specific boxes to check rofl
Clematis is the best (unless we count Poppy. I would commit crimes for Poppy). I swore I'd try one Faith route even though the Kaffirans come across as so gosh darn mean, but I settled on Glady. He's sweet as a batch of cupcakes. I imagine he's getting a hug CG in the future, right? 🥺 I'm rooting for their redemption arcs. But Zinnia did *not* like me in my first playthrough lol I sassed his Bloom scale into the negative 😆
Dude your Pixabay search went waaaaaay nicer than mine did months ago, what did you type in? 😆 I had to immediately open up the credits and see where the menu music came from.
It was a really sweet story. I like the simple but crucial attention to the background, made it loads more immersive. 🥰 It's just characters sharing their feelings and I eat that stuff up.
I imagine I got a neutral ending and I want the others. Or at least the best one. 🥺 I wonder how many tries it'll take...
