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yeah, i know right? there's a lot of issues like that for me, as i proof-read stuff as a side job. its a little off-putting

I was three quarters joking about it all lol, i really dont have many gripes with the story at all. I rather enjoy it! It has inspired me to write a similar project of my own. But ill double down for fun! 

Axes require mining for metals which requires a mine, smelting metals, pouring melted metals into a mold, cutting and polishing metals, it requires woodworking and adhesives which requires more metal and well- you get the point. My main issue isnt with the axes. 

Either way, he shouldnt be surprised the husky is 30 something years old because it was one of the first things the AI explained as we awaken. 

Another problem that persists with me is the endomorphic body description bring incorrect thing, which is still like a mosquito bite that won't stop itching but only when you bother it, so thats a thing i have a gripe with

Thats about it though, not much else i can complain about as far as ive gotten. At least nothing close to beung worth typing out and making a point of.

We could get semantical about a lot of things and argue that, for example about axes, we see no sci fi technology (apart from the crypod), and everything we have today is all we see artifacts of, and we dont consider wheels as primitive tech and theyre just as prevelant as axes and shields in our day, which are used throughout all walks of life and therefore arent primitive but rather could be argued that they are "simple", but certainly not simple to make. Theyre simple as in how a car wheel is simple. Calling that primitive just isnt a true reflection of what it is. But i dont think thats worth even debating about lol. 

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i have very major issues with plot holes and descriptions in the beginning of the story. it describes forged tools like axes, shields, blankets, and ovens, pelt skinning hooks, the like, as "primitive and ramshackle technology." and then goes on to describe how there are electric heaters and lightbulbs among them. this is very much not primitive tech. apparently, you also have no memory of your past or anything but your name. and yet you somehow recognize that "this isnt my home" and that "im in the future." how does that work? and apparently we completely understand a language from the future and our AI brain chip can extract it from our subconcious memory and translate the language to english. and yet we cant remember anything- other than multiple complex languages. also it called a very muscular, tall, "athletic" anthro wolf an "endomorphic" body style. blatantly incorrect. endomorphs are like gnomes. like i said, major issues. and our wolf companion occasionally entirely changes his grammatical structure and intelligence. he goes from brutish and non-talkative, to sounding like he's speaking a foreign language, to normal-ish. oh yeah we also can recognize a rusting rotting heap of metal as an electric toothbrush, and we understand all of its functions. and we "barely remember" our name. not buying it. oh and our AI pegs the wolf at mid 30's when we first meet him- then we later ask how long he has been a blackrunner, and he says 21 years. we are then shocked and ask "what?? how old ARE you!?" i dunno, some consistency would be nice. also tahki cannot shut the fuck up about dicks. i swear to god to anyone reading this- she talks about dicks every 10 words. "ill rip your dick off!" "har har, this person next to me loves dicks!" "we have a festival where everyone fucks eachother with their dicks!" "what were you doing over there, rubbing your dick!?" after the first like hour of the story, all the world building and descriptioning starts to even out and make sense. there's a lot more to complain about but its barely even released as a story so ill wait and see how it turns out- under heavy scrutiny. there are also made up words to try and sound sci fi and some words outright make no sense, like the endomorph athletic thing. and the chief of the tribe girl is convinced we arent human, but she occasionally calls us human. when everyone else just says we are an "it." even though she is the "most skeptical" person of us out of everyone who knows us. just- there are a lot of gripes i have about the narraration. i can compile a list at least long enough to rival santa's list. but like i said ill wait to see how it pans out. please fix this. thank you. let me know if you want a comprehensive list. overall i like the story, plot, setting, its all great. i just- have major issues with the introduction part. its all the introduction part. can we get like a remaster of just the introduction part? i would love that, thanks. I MEAN, THE WOLF ISNT EVEN CLOSE TO ENDOMORPHIC! LOOK AT HIM! HRRRNGGH other than that though i really do enjoy the story, its a good read. really good job dude. i liked the way it was like with the words. and how it described things. i really did enjoy it. i guess the onl- okay no i have a bigger issue now, there's all this talk about sharks and oceans but looking at the map- we are no where close to an ocean- especially judging by the apline region. these people shouldnt even know oceans exist. "the demons in the blackzones are like sharks in an ocean" nuh uh. all you know is forest and mountain. much more accurate to say the demons are like bears in the forest. very subpar. also, learn how to feather the outlines of your character images into the background.