I do love how this seems to reverse the expected roles, throwing in a bit of some of my favorite VNs! I already gave a lot of my commentary during the stream, but great job!
Very cool story, and just what the provided sprite enjoyers are looking for! It reminded me of the one of the Burrows sub-plots, with beings beyond understanding, mixed with a bit of Percy Jackson and the Olympians. While the Light in the Darkness was barely there, the sprites' theme of the Apocalypse was well done here with Famine! I wish I learned about the mentioned pantheon more, as the horsemen of the apocalypse are not usually linked with gods. Great job!
Well, I am interested to see where this goes! I can envision it being quite the interesting little tale. It reminds me of stuff like Rainbow and Super Onmium which each have creative uses of the Isekai genre. I would be especially interested in if options were available, like Password or Daring Choices, which lead to more replayability. Good luck on fleshing it out!
Very interesting idea! Quite the unique spin on a superhero-supervillain genre. I also adore the idea that the rabbit's ears are so big that they can hear thoughts! Great job on getting this done this quickly! Do remember, though, that you can't submit a new version during June, as you mentioned in the closing notes.
I love the Miazaki-style storytelling going on here. We hear about the strange happenings and the way the world works through passing commentary on how well the system works. There is magic, both ritualistic and seemingly enchantment based, but we know only that there is some degree of sacrifice to it. The love tale was a little bland, with the Wolf falling for the MC off the bat and through the end. I thought it was interesting that the "Light in the darkness" comment is only through the non-horny route.
This is a cute love story, which includes subjects which I will be using later for my own writing, namely transience of connection, limits of time, and the change and immutation of love.
I think my rating may be a bit skewed from this being my first rating, but wow!
I due my due diligence to try to be understanding of specifically invisible and mental disabilities, so this kind of take is a soft spot for me. I love the use of music, sound effects, and the restricted space. It reminds me of the original Saw movie, which was made by a group of film graduates who rented out a single room to make their movie in, and told a story of being trapped there.
Hello, the best way to contact me is on Discord, and I am on the FVN server, username MimberyEarth. I tend to make notes of basically every typo, grammar error, and other issue I see when I read any VN. Some notable VNs that have had notable changes made by my efforts are Three's a Party, Heat Source, Tianhehui, and Roads Yet Traveled. I have worked on editing code to make changes (as well through screenshots), and I always propose at least one alternative in each case.
