Thank you! I really like the Dark Elves of Grimdark Future, quite different then the dark eldar of 40k.
I appreciate the feedback, always looking to get better. I was trying to have smaller facts fall by the wayside in order to emphasize the current situation, but I think you're right in saying I dropped too many of them. More set up for the rescue would have improved the piece or simply letting him hit the ground. I didn't want to write such a sad piece though. The rescue was supposed to come off as an /impossible/ rescue, helping to shore up the theme of the jam, I don't think I conveyed that enough in the writing.
High lighting Grimdark Future's world in such a light, cold an calculated juxtaposed by the very essence of humanity that he gave up. A terrific story, the mood board's minis are a beautiful addition.
I have come back to re-read this story several times and found I enjoyed it tremendously each time. The repeat of impossibility, can't speak properly, can't protect the Pegasus, can't save everyone, drives a terrific story with goodness at its heart. If there was a vote for our favorite in the jam, your story would take my vote.
