Thank you! The issue with map was partially space but also just figuring out how to do it sensibly for a potentially vast space which isn't static - I basically ran out of time to work it out. It's an interesting problem to work on though!
Fantastic - the mystery is really well done, the setting feels very fleshed out given the space available, it would be easy to work into a campaign. The cover is great and ripping it is a nice solution to adding a bit more space for text within the page limit. Definitely one I'd like to run.
I love this, the art and are layout are especially beautiful. And I really like that the setting encourages approaches other than fighting (I will always take any opportunity for stealth but I can envision a lot of other approaches as well)
This is a lovely idea for a quest and interpretation of the title, and really well executed. My only criticism is I'd have liked a download option more orientated towards reading on a screen, but in print it'd work great. Overall, wonderful.
Thank you for the feedback! Interesting what you say about the clues, I was wary of making it too difficult to find a way forward given the scale of the environment - but I agree it would be better if it were more challenging, and clues /encounters related to specific areas. Will ponder as I work out the mapping!
Love everything in this, the Green Hand and its Fingers are very satisfying. The items and NPCs are all great. Are the nine dead Fingers in the nine sacs??
The story and atmosphere here are great. I really like the Geometric Wraith and all the Minor Finds. Leaves me wanting to know more about how Pellen got into this situation!
I love the idea of trapping the characters inside the staff. The art is beautiful. My only slight criticism is that it took me a while to spot that there are exits indicated on the cover map in addition to those mentioned in the room descriptions, so I couldn't figure out how you got into some of the areas. Otherwise all great and I really like using the playing cards at the end.
I really like randomly generating the space by rolling onto the paper, great idea. I think it would be useful to include something on how to deal with duplicate results - could you end up with 6 cathedrals? (Not that I am against this necessarily!) Also would be helpful to know a bit about what happens at the eclipse and to have some stats for the blade itself. I understand the limitations of space though, there is a lot in here already (and apologies if any of this is already in there and I've missed it). Overall looks really fun. I love the cathedral made of wax!
Really like this, especially the cover stories and parlor entertainments. I think for flavour I'd suggest settling on one Treasure and have it tie a bit more closely to Pluto's character, rather than leaving it to chance, but that said all of the options for treasures are pretty great.
Very on theme and beautiful layout. I think the relationship between the beast and the storm needs to be slightly clearer - I take it that the beast conjures the storm (and killing it dispels the storm), but I can't see it explicitly stated. Otherwise, spot on.
Love the creatures in this especially the Bone Giraffes. I'd like to see the surrounding areas a bit more narratively tied to the crash site - have the inhabitants of these places reacted to the crash? was there anything of note at the crash site before it got atlas'd? - but it's a lot of fun as it is. Hope you post the extended version if you make it!
I love the art and atmosphere of this. I found the layout confusing initially, but it does make sense for printing. I'm not sure I understand how the puzzle works - do the figurines themselves glow, or are they just recognisable as the spirits that have previously been encountered, who have particular colours associated with them? Would love to see a longer version with more space to elaborate on all the areas and the spirits.
Thank you so much! It's my first module and I didn't really give myself enough time to think about the technical aspects of writing something system agnostic, so I imagine I've done it in a slightly peculiar way, but hopefully it is workable...
I really like the atmosphere of this, and the layout works super well to fit all the info into the four pages. I especially want to show some appreciation for your posting it so early before the deadline, it was very helpful to be able to see an example of what kind of thing can reasonably be fit into four pages!
Thank you! I struggled a bit with the prompt initially when thinking about the literal planet (no moons there), but going a bit oblique with it made things fall into place more (at least for me!)
Hi, I realised I messed up exporting to PDF meaning the text of my submission is not searchable, it is just an image. (I am a beginner at this and I was putting it together very late at night (in my time zone) in order to meet the deadline - so was in a bit of a panic.) I'd like to upload a version with searchable text but otherwise unaltered - I'll leave the original submission up as well. Is that all right or would adding another file cause any problems?
