Nomax really had some time to shine this time! Very fun scholar that he is, enough that I was kinda disappointed when I went down the spicier path that almost led to him making a mess in his pants and not getting to see the more magical path where he gets to show off a little more. Beautiful seeing him by the water with his explanation, though I suppose it was a little funny seeing the shift from majesty to MC just fondling him in the naughtier path.
Editing time: "Fine... Fine.. At least you knew Rings O' Barley. That saved us." (Rigs)
Choice "Nomax, some relaxed company is just what you need this evening" (Debatable; could be relaxed if Nomax himself is relaxed or relaxing if the shared company is inducing relaxation)
"Nomax closes his eyes, grasping at memories more slippery than eels." (Notated as Nomax saying this when it is a description)
"Mayhaps. When I smentioned I read it a few more times than needed..."
"The painted chuckles softly." (missing 'dog', though I suppose it might not necessarily be wrong to refer to the painted dog as its descriptor, just unsure if you were making a stylistic choice here that you haven't before afaik within the work.)
"And... All of it is in that book. The passage I recited is even interspersed with impeccable drawings of the small critters." (Personal call, I feel like Nomax wouldn't say 'critters', at least not while being in a more academic mode? Your character though! Just felt a little surprising as a reader to see that all of a sudden.)
"A few sailors have taken their eyes off him, mumbling." (References Sam post gender reveal)
"Yes, sir?" transitioning into "His clothing presents no hindrance when the cheetah makes his graceful way over the gunwale..." (Arthur's lack of legs are revealed during the transition, but understandable if that's not the highest priority)
"Quarantines around here? Are they expecting the plague? . But... that's true, yes, we're all healthy here."(Extra period after the question mark)
"Following the direction She points, you can just make out the jolly boat..." (Capitalization)
"You're not sure what She's got in mind, but Samuel has the respect of the officers, and you'd like to earn her respect in turn." (capitalization)
"A little. If you visit, or just sail along the coast of Andaluc_a, you'll see all the torres we built. The watchtowers." (Instead of an i or í, a strange little box appears. Screenshot attached. Might be dependent on Mac version or even something else?)