Nooo, you don't need to change it at all. I actually really liked the jealousy, it felt natural. I also love the idea of the love triangle! It feels like they both spend more time with the MC, so it makes sense that they are closer to them than to each other. Honestly, I was just curious, it might have sounded like I didn't like it, but I really do like it. It felt in character for Leese. He's my fave and while I adore Gabe (sorry babe), he'll always be my first choice. I loved everything about your writing, so I look forward to it but take all the time you need! :)
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I adore your story and hope you're doing well! I have a question I didn't see anywhere though: My MC slept with Lyth and Leese was jealous afterward and said he doesn't share. Why is he in a Poly Route then? With that statement I'd feel he would be jealous no matter what, but he's okay when it's Gabriel? This just left me puzzled but hey I understand I'm also a jealous person Leese, lol. Thanks again!
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