Neat. Though I kinda miss the Juju joke that was removed from the start. I also kinda didn't like how the scene where Boyfriend sees you naked was changed. It kinda feels wierd to me that a fully grown adult would react like that to being seen in their underwear. ESPECIALLY if the main character was male.
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Unless it's going to take you over three months to get the money you'd probably be better off just saving till you can afford it. The price was just raised recently and I really can't see it going $30+ anytime soon.
Just so we're clear, I was joking about the 2019 thing. It hasn't even been confirmed that there will be a delay.
Besides, my understanding was that the price is going to go up at release, so you'd just end up paying more regardless.
So it just occurred to me that Mr. Boyfriend can become a hit man. I'm not sure how you guys are going to play this out, but on the surface it seems like it may be a bit too dark and gritty. The same could be said for drug dealer I guess, but that one isn't quite as bad compared to the former.
I'm just going to make this topic since there isn't really a topic where such posts make sense...
Anyway this demo was more entertaining than I thought it'd be. I originally thought the MC was a little too ...bitchy for a lack of a better word, but they have some small charm to them. I do feel like you guys are going to have a somewhat hard time making this character not seem scummy though.
I'm quite interested how your going to make "sexy (r17) scenes" without showing the MC in any capacity.
I'm not sure why this sounds so aggressive in my head. It's not supposed to be negative in any regard.
Okay, to start: Sorry.
Itch.io doesn't tell me when someone responds to my posts, so I had no idea this post was made.
As for how long the demo should be: I can't answer that.
While my statement of "It's too short" is very accurate, it really didn't encapsulate what was wrong. In the demo you meet the two love interests, meet your sister and friend(?)/Neighbor(?) Then something happens....and that's it.
I have no idea what either the plot or genre is. (It seems magical, but alot of genre's can be magical)
I don't really know who any of the characters are outside small character traits.
You need to develop these ideas a little bit more before I can really say anything constructive or otherwise. I will say you should probably have us go into the head of the main character a bit more. I am going to be looking into the world through his eyes after all. It'd be nice to know what kind of 'lens' he is.