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Thank you for commenting! 

One thing that I have begun to realize recently is that there is a lot of clarity that I am forgetting to incorporate when wanting to tell information. 

- For starters, I probably should've made clearer that this was set in AOF, and that the humans were part of the Vinci faction.

-  I dropped some names about a Vinci scholar and academy who's mission was to be one with the automa they create (robots powered by the mindstone/gemstones), implying that the human with the mindstone "wife" had also bought in into this ideology. all of this was really obscure information from the vinci faction book that I shouldn't had brought in without explanation. 

- In the ending, I had wanted to imply that Xochi was on a ritualistic walk up onto an "altar" where she too would be made into a golem (as was with the human, and with the chameleoon looking 'golem' Xochi saw), although it seems that it kinda just felt like she was going on an infinite walk upstairs.

Fish!

thank you so much! I haven't done creative while in a while, and one problem I felt that I've always had were run-on sentences. 

sorry 😅 i wanted to imply that a ritual where they would become one with the machine, as the vinci scholar was so exited to be.

woah I really enjoyed this one! and the poems are weaved masterfully! Good job!

The moment where the saurian explained his plan, was such a cool aha! moment.

Thank you! Although them being a "golem tribe" was actually an erroneous assumption by Xochi, in reality they are the Me'kah creations of the axolotls

even though you had to strain yourself, I do think you still did a pretty good job at connecting the climax with tidbits from the rest of the story.

woah, that took a bit of a turn, although with a great creative use for the pen!

love the use of the lore from the vinci faction book! I don't think I can get enough from reading all about the Vinci in whatever they may be doing, and it seems like you too would've benefited in having more space to write in to get a fuller ending.