I finally got around to reading this story. It has a realistic urban setting and a likable, believable main character. Just what I needed!
On the downside: the story suffers from the typical problems of novice authors who haven’t yet mastered the “show, don’t tell” principle. Virtually every line of dialogue could be cut in half, and it would only be better for it.
On the plus side: I can totally believe that a story like this could happen in real life. I hope the girl learns the right lessons.
Overall, I was satisfied. Thanks for the invitation, and good luck!