You’ve used hyphens in places that should’ve been em-dashes, like when a sentence gets interrupted. Which makes this pretty unreadable /jk. Nah, I love this VN. Great work!
Wow, I’m grateful for this incredibly in-depth review. You make alot of good points, especially about the core concept. Yes, Wonder’s perception of other’s normality wasn’t supposed to be the absolute truth and it was more just an exploration of his feelings, without any clear conclusion. You mention that characters should learn something, but I think, at least in theory, stories can be good without the characters changing at all, personally. Not to say that I did it well. It could’ve been better if we saw more of Wonder’s life. Also, about the cable TV thing, Mirth is definitely a wildcard, but I think even my own perception of whats normal might be a little flawed, because I’ve family and acquaintances who use cable here in germany. But yeah, thanks a ton for your review! :3
The fanfic being the best part is some bittersweet irony, haha. Thanks so much for the thoughtful comment, I really just appreciate hearing your and everyone else’s opinions! One day I wish to create something more serious.
Wdym weird signal to give? I was just being open and saying whatever felt natural. The 1-day dev time is the context to why the story is underbaked. ^^’
Thank you for the review!! Those are some valid questions and areas that could use improvement. Yeah, the focus was supposed to be on Mine’s persuasion. You’ve given me stuff to reflect upon, even if this won’t get an update. :3
Thank youuuu! ^^ If you’re asking about symbolism, I guess my answer is this:
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The overall theme I had in mind was consumerism and how easily you can get convinced into buying something you don’t want. The protagonist didn’t want to buy the elixir, but in the end took the deal anyway. After taking it, he convinces himself that he wanted it all along, even though he didn’t. (What exactly the wolf got out of it is irrelevant to the story)
It doesn’t relate much to light in the dark. I guess neon lights kinda symbolize the seductive glow of consumerism :3
aaaa this was so sweet and wholesome! it was an overall pleasant read, even if it's mostly small talk and nothing actually happens. still, lots of good fun bits. the whole group is just very cute. i also love seeing vns focus on friendship.
Very atmospheric and immersive. The general mood and vibe reflect the sad reality the wolves were forced into. Art and music are also on point. The story has me really intrigued and I just can't wait to see the rest of it!
A lot of effort went into this and it was definetly worth it. I love the art so much and it's oozing personality. The story was certainly fun, as well as interesting. There's a lot I like about it, but also a couple aspects I'm not a fan of, such as Walt's stark shift in behavior over minor choices. But yeah, overall this is a great VN! >w<
thanks a ton for the comment! i actually think that mentioning "rom-com" at the end might be a mistake, because what they're doing is not what people usually consider a rom-com. also as you said, there may be a few details that dont make total sense at the moment. either way, thank you!
What a fun read. The writing just in general is very enjoyable and amusing, especially during the office meeting. I like the way everyone is characterized, including the MC. I feel like the ending could have explored the serious themes a little deeper. It was a big shift in tone, but definetly an interesting one. All in all, this was a great VN >w<
