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I do have a soft spot for Havoc elements and this story does have it. I always enjoyed when mortals try to negotiate with daemons. I mean to haggle a reality defying being for petty boons in the material world has always been a fun topic to write on. I think in this story we have a good exchange and conclusion. Good work!

I think this is one of the best stories that applied the theme "impossible" as naturally as possible. It did not feel forced, it definitely had a space horror/mystery vibe. It felt as if the theme and story were one and the same rather than forced. Excellent work!

Definitely can feel the effort to deliver the story through the narration that requires reading between the lines, what is and is not being said. Subtle. Excellent work!

There is a lot going on here, I really think this has plenty of potential, but too much to get crammed into a single page. The story feels much bigger, and given a few extra pages would let it stretch it's wings and really take off. Good work though! 

You definitely made great use of a single page here. There is a lot going on here and the scale just feels like it gets grander by the second. Forbidden truths or ignorance is bliss, an impossible choice yet one had to be made.

Well written. In one page you conveyed a lot with Jonathan and the yield for the set up with pretty good, believable. Definitely a good angle to work in the assigned theme into the story with the surprise. 

Well written. In one page you conveyed a lot with Jonathan and the yield for the set up with pretty good, believable. Definitely a good angle to work in the assigned theme into the story with the surprise. 

I enjoyed the idea of two less than informed types meddling and succeeding against their expectations, since they thought it wasn't possible. Excellent work. Good banter, good characters.

I enjoyed the idea of two less than informed types meddling and succeeding against their expectations, since they thought it wasn't possible. Excellent work. Good banter, good characters.

It is not impossible if you believe otherwise! Though it is nice to have some saurian/lizardmen featured stories! You did great here. Lizards versus Rats, what fun!

I do enjoy the cerebral horror, it echoes to me almost a lovecraftian unreliable narration. Is it really happening or is simply reality buckling beneath the stress?

Well written, very cerebral experience. The oppressive atmosphere with the creeping doubts, intrusive thoughts, the despair of thinking of walking away feeling like an impossible task was a unique take of the assigned theme, subtle. Good work!

Very good work! Firmly established in the Grimdark OPR universe. Weaving the Impossible theme into insurmountable odds of scale and circumstance is very solid. Started close, describing what the character was feeling and how it contradicted with 'normal' expectation, a slick way to inform the reader how they are stepping into anything but normal. A bit dark you might say, a bit grim too.

Excellent work. You did a lot with 1 page. Setting was in quite solid, easing the reader, establishing stakes, even a conclusion all within the constraints of the assignment. The theme was cleverly worked in. Impossible to rise above one's station, the improbable even, I dare say the Havoc mutants being provided a way out by sheer luck/chance is just another layer to appreciate. 

I think it is a bit of fun, since Orkz have the uncanny ability to defy all logic and reason through sheer belief. It's not that the Ork believes he can, it is simply he disbelieves he cannot. The cold logic of a machine can never appreciate that. It is simply not possible. 

Thanks for the kind words and thank you for reading it.

I really appreciate the input and thank you for taking the time to read it. Glad you enjoyed it and definitely flattered in having my villain compared to such a larger than life villain such as Cersi Lannister.

Thanks for reading and I appreciate the input. I’ll try to do better next time to avoid making the central character too one dimensional.

First things first, the description "The station was abandoned long ago… but not everything left." is an splendid blurb, definitely caught my attention immediately. 

The psychological elements are excellent. You did great using very little time (text) and created more questions than answers incidentally without sacrificing clarity. You showed, did not tell. There is a lot here to unpack, technological innovation and experimentation to solve old problems of the human psyche being chiefly a pillar here. One page indeed, a good cerebral horror moment in the Grimdark universe. 

I appreciate the input! I really hope you enjoyed it.

It is my first time participating in one of these jams, but the premise of conveying a story within a single page really spoke to me. A splendid challenge to do a lot with little. With that being said, I am grateful you took the time to read it and that it was clear that it belonged to the Age of Fantasy.