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realized about 5 mins after i posted this it was on the old version 😵‍💫 I want to have it here as well so folks looking at this page will see how much I recommend the book!!! 

I cannot think of a way to describe just how much I fell in love with every part of this book  and just how much joy it has given me. I will try though ٩(ര̀ᴗര́) I think of everything to soak up I truly did enjoy the characters the most, but granted I loved everything. Val as the POV character made my heart swell because hes just got such a way about him that scratches my brain just right. Hes also a little freak which is perfect and good. It took me some time to get to KIYE but I recommend it fully!! 

I cannot think of a way to describe just how much I fell in love with every part of this book  and just how much joy it has given me. I will try though ٩(ര̀ᴗര́) I think of everything to soak up I truly did enjoy the characters the most, but granted I loved everything. Val as the POV character made my heart swell because hes just got such a way about him that scratches my brain just right. Hes also a little freak which is perfect and good. It took me some time to get to KIYE but I recommend it fully!! 

The art showed up at first, and it was really pretty! It sporadically came up during the half after the portal. I got to "It doesn't matter. Now walk." and then the game froze ;;w; I think it's because I started typing in the comments maybe? Either way, from what I was able to play it seems like you all have a strong game technically. Story wise I know its just be beginning that I could play and I'm sure theres more to it (and the art probably helps) but it feels like things move very fast or without much explanation. We did only have a few weeks to work on this though so I don't blame y'all in the slightest. Good work!! 

Played through a couple times. Died the first time, took the same team and made it to a "to be continued", and then brought another team and made it through the golden door! It was fun to use different teamcomps and figure weigh the pros and cons of each character. I also loved the styling of the game!! Especially the background, it was really cool !! Its also got a lot of complex things going on which is really nice (Like the character selection screen and the way the game is formatted) The only comment/critique I have is to make the restart button slightly more obvious, it blends into the team composition. All in all, I loved playing it and it was really fun 

The game plays really well, though I wasn't able to finish because I missed a coin ;;w;; Very visually pleasing game though!!

This is a really cute game! I had a little trouble with the jumping at first but once I got the hang of it, it wasn't bad! I made it as far as the purple level but could not get past the spider. 

I love the opening start up scene and the art of the game!! It was hard to figure out the jump timing and moving around, and I did die a few times, but the art being nice to look at made that hurt less. Great job! 

The controls are hard to use, the character moves very quickly, but I love the animation and the design here! The bats are really cute as well, and I like how they move around in a few different directions on their path.

this is such a cute game!!! I love the character animation and I love the UI. I'm not that good at it, but thats more of an issue with my abilities. Great work!!!

I think the art is really nice but it is a very hard game to move around in and I wasn't able to progress. The visuals are really nice though!! 

I love the aesthetic of this game and the animations, although it is a bit hard to move around in I was still able to make it to the end. The music is also really nice!! 

This was a cool story! I loved how the illustrations work together and the color scheme of the game suits it. Would have loved to see the Spider Queen but perhaps not seeing her is part of what makes her scary. 

The yellow text makes it hard to read in some places, and I'm not sure I grasp the story, but mechanically this is great and I love how you have the background as an illustration!! 

I would have loved to see something more you than another persons property for this. Seeing illustrations and worldbuilding that you created would have made this a more memorable game. Mechanics wise, it works well, the images all load and the links all work. The theme of amnesia and waking up in a strange world is interesting! I'd just wished it wasn't just screenshots and a telling of Minecraft. 

The styling seems to not be consistent, is that purposeful? Other than that, I loved the game, and how it felt like it was, in the end, about cleaning up after yourself. The illustrations were fun, and I feel like I kind of tripped and fell into finding what the monster wanted, but that was kind of fun! 

Technically this is really impressive!! I like the color scheme you have with the peach and green, and the font choice fits that. There are a few moments where I feel like it's hard to connect to whats happening in the story,  theres no lead up to explain why we should care about her lost wings, or why she lost them, or if it's common to have them. There are a lot of questions this leaves, like is she in pain? I think it would be nice to have some more on that. This is nitpicky, but capitalizing words for emphasis in the middle of the sentence disrupts the flow a little bit. 

Loved the feel of this game! And how you made your images gifs, it adds to the atmosphere of the game. My only suggestion would be to make the text a smidge bigger, it's a bit hard to read at the size it's at now.

I adore Norbert!!!!! He's so cute, and I care so much about his joy. One of your images was broken but other than that this was a very cute and engaging game! I liked how the theme changed depending on where you were, and I loved the character design of Norbert and Prunella! 

This was a cute game! I would have liked to know what the stakes were, how many humans had died, why was the worm sending tiny humans, how was he turning them tiny? I also would have loved to see some pictures at pivotal moments. Your use of reputation and health was nice as well! 

Loved seeing illustrations and fun styling for the game! I ended up dying in my play through but I still had a fun. It was nice to see the consequences for my choices at the end, especially seeing that those were all secret stats or only mentioned in the text until the end. It feels like a very fleshed out game!! 

I liked the game! I'd love to see illustrations to go along with some of the passages, at least when characters are introduced. The image you have on the first page seems broken on my end at least, it shows up as the little missing image icon. Other than that, I'd say keep exploring this theme!!

Crit for class lets gooo!! I love your game so far!! I do think running the text through a spellchecker/googledocs would be beneficial but I also need to do that. I love the character of Florin and would like to see some visuals of them if possible. Some of the dark red/wine text is hard to read on the black background. It's also hard to play this game out of fullscreen since the window is so small, there is a way to change that if you want!!