Hey, just pointing out some errors I’ve spotted. Hope I’m being helpful here!
During the car chase when Owen, Phillip and the two debt collectors were flying by you and Sissel it referred to the two vehicles as “two cars”, but one of them was a motorcycle.
After manhandling Hershel out of his room Sissel says “I’m no good enough for this” (presuming you meant “not”).
Once again thanks for your continuous hard work on this VN, it’s definitely up there with some of the best ones on itch and in my personal top 3.