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Hello Mr. (or Ms.) Cibbon. I have just finished the latest version of your game and i want to share some of my thoughts on it.

First of all i wanna talk about what is already here, what i like and don't like before i talk what i wish would be expanded on.

I wanna first mention the artstyle and the animations which is what initially drew me to the game. Particularly the animations are very reminiscent of Goddesses' Whim. They are very high quality and full of detail which tends to be a weakness of a lot of other AVNs so i hope it continues in further updates.

I like the overall writing of the game so far. All of the jokes landed for me and i liked the overall presentation and writing choices. I don't love the setup of having five different goddess that each represent one of the five senses ruling over the universe, and the cold war they have over Manaka. I'm not crazy on this setup but it's not a complete deal breaker for me. The characters seem to have interesting and distinct personalities. My personal favourite so far is Belle. I like how she's not just cold and distant, she's acutally serious and straight to business. That kind of personality, particularly on women, has a lot of potential and is quite hard to write, specially when the cracks start to show. I hope it gets the attention it deserves.

I think the pacing of the story so far has been quite adequate. The only part that i think dragged on was the execution scene before our characters arrived. I think something could have been cut without jeopardizing the scene and making it a little less boring. Other than that the rest was fine. Nothing felt rushed or overstayed it's welcome.

There are some interesting ideas in here that i hope get improved on. With the slave knights having powers related to the main five sense that really gives room to some interesting interactions and problem solving from the part of the characters. Specially with the MC's heightened sense of smell. I hope that gets expanded upon and used to solve problems in some out of the box ways in the future. 

Manaka having a scarce male population and because of such scarcity men being essentially a protected class in this world opens to a lot of interesting world building possibilties. I hope that there is a satisfactory explanation as to why men are so scarce in this world and i hope that this fact is handled apropriately. For example, in such a world, men wouldn't really be able to take on more dangerous and risky jobs since a man's life would be much more valued. It would also mean that men have a higher market value not only in the job market but also in the dating market since there are literally just less of them. I hope that these societal repercusions of men being scarce are properly thought out.

Something else that i hope gets expanded upon is why and how Fudge knows so much the slave knight contract. Specially the bit about her knowing that anything promised by the goddesses in their own domain gets automatically added to the contract seemed suspicious to me. How could she discover something like that? It might be something incredibly trivial and unimportant but i like seeing little loose like that being tied up.

Anyway that's it for my impromtu review. Thanks for reading all the way through. Excited to hear your response!

Helo

I spend a lot of time and effort on the animations and overall design of the characters and being compared to Goddesses Whim is an honor in itself. Thank you very much!

Very happy you like the writing. I try to keep it as engaging as possible while still having a bit of comedy. I can reveal that there is more to the premise than what has been revealed so far and I'm very excited to see if your view changes after that is revealed. 

All the things you have listed such as MC's heightened sense of smell, scarce male population, and Fudge's mysterious knowledge will all be expanded upon. I pretty much have the entire outline of the storyline done, so I can promise you that all the little loose ends I'm throwing out will be tied up.

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excited to see what's down the pipeline for this one. I also wanted to ask if all sex scenes are going to be optional as a matter of principe moving forward. It seemed to me to be out of character for the option to refuse Fudge's handjob (?) to even be available. I thought that maybe it would have some repercusions on the story but for now it seems like it just avoids the scene with Fudge and nothing else happens.

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I plan on making all the more niche fetishes optional. Even though Fudge being the lovable little goofball she is.  I know that Slime-girls might not be appealing to everybody. So things like "Slime-girls", "footjobs", "extreme femdom" will never be forced on the player. There will always be another option or skippable. I also don't want to penalize people for skipping things they don't like, so there will never be a bad outcome for skipping such things.

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I guess "niche fetiche" is up to interpretation cause that seemed quite tame to me, not enough to warrant the choice but it makes sense. Also i didn't necessarily mean negative repercussions from the choice to refuse, just some repercussion. Like maybe it causes her to act different toward the MC in the future. Or maybe not letting her view our memories changes the relationship in some way.