the story i have seen so far in the demo is great. love their interaction, the character development, and they feel like the characters i know.
my only problem is, Rune. He is described as toned, and that is how he was on Dawn Chorus, and we all got used to him looking like that, got emotionally invested in him as a character, same with Devon. but now he is buff. Kind of went from an Otter to a full fledged Wolf. Even the face has changed quite a bit. it looks like his older brother, not necessarily Rune.
now If I read this first, i would love the characters as they are, but we ( or at least I did) got used to how he looked in Dawn Chorus. I am not badgering the artist, the work is beautiful, but now what we had come ot be invested into already.
Yeah, probably could get used to it, but this is just feed back after reading what others have said, and actually reading the demo myself. hmm, maybe the new body with the old face that we all got used to might be better. i do not know, just tossing out an idea.
either way, you are a great vn creator and have a wonderful team with you and i do love your stories I have read so far. just my thoughts on this mate